First page of real content. So now you know what's become of The Canid-Quarter and the Human-Half... they're in the brain basement. The strings attached to them are a visual metaphor for the fact their powers are being used by Kaeti without their permission, but it's not ever pointed out so i thought I'd lay it out there.
I kind of figured that was what the lines meant - that in a sense, they are puppets and no longer in control.
Kaeti definitely needs a slapdown. And I have to wonder... does Keti and her Canid Quarter have to find a way to merge in order to stand a chance against Kaeti and the Sword of Slayskull?
Can the strings be climbed? (Can each climb the other's strings to escape together?)
The color of the walls helps create a sense of... Other to the walls. Suggesting they are more powerful as a result than just plain walls would be. (The television monitor so they can watch their friends/pack mates be cut down is just adding injury to insult!)
If you multiplied my crazy by ally's crazy and squared the result... it still wouldn't be as crazy as Keti.
On a side note, I was re-reading chapters 1-6 last night, sussing out my learning curve, and boy did you and me do a kick ass job of foreshadowing. there is SO much stuff in there that I could have sworn we ad-libbed but obviously we had it all planned. When this chapter finishes I think we should have a joint re-read and review of the whole damn thing here on the forum, just for kicks.
*fistbumps Ally* best dudes forever! we rocked out!