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Post by X'o'Lore on May 31, 2012 6:50:12 GMT
Just ask Tim apparently.
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Post by Emily on Jun 13, 2012 22:00:37 GMT
I think this page might be the place in the original script where it stopped being 'random nonsense' and started being 'story with a plot'
this version of dspring is heavily chopped up and rearranged from now on. The original cursed forest had a lot more random encounters with wildlife and there was a giant bit on fire mountain with robot suits and teleporters in the middle that had to go almost in it's entirety. I'm currently working on the look for the only 2 genuine original characters in this story so that i can bring them in in a more sensible manner.
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Post by X'o'Lore on Jun 13, 2012 22:53:25 GMT
And here all I see Ally's foot sticking out at me and I'm thinking "Trick or treat, smell my feet..." well, the song kinda dies there because you realize it's not Halloween, and even if it was, you usually ring the doorbell rather than kick the door in, but y'know, let's not get too caught up on the details, huh? Let's just bask in Ally looking like some kind of total badass like an 80's action hero. Y'know, those guys who'd yank grenade pins out with their teeth even though those pins are actually really hard to pull out and you'd probably rip your teeth out trying to do that, but really that's just how badass they are.
But anyway, hooray for heavy editing for clarity? At this point it has seemed like random nonsense is basically what dspring is all about. Now you tell me that this is actually going somewhere? I might have to look back to remember why they were even going through this forest in the first place now.
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Post by Mr Picalini on Jun 14, 2012 0:09:44 GMT
I might have to look back to remember why they were even going through this forest in the first place now. Plot contrivance. No, seriously, that's the actual reason why their going through the forest.
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Post by Emily on Jun 14, 2012 9:12:22 GMT
Kendi water to fix stuart's incurable brain injury? I think.
Basically the reasoning behind Dspring is that it was written around the same time Me and Ally were writing IBYKS and Tim was writing Legend of Stu (which he made me take offline because he has a deep hatred of it, unlike me and Ally who just find our useless teenage writing skills hilarious) and anyway stu wanted to write a story too. this story started off as a series of extremely random vignettes and parodies, and gradually turned into an actual quest. it's already been heavily edited- for instance Helen and Jen (the mysterious stabby twins) only appeared at the very end of the story in the first version- as I've been drawing it, I've been bringing in extra elements that tie into future events, and cutting out the bits that contradict or serve no purpose.
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Post by Ally on Jun 14, 2012 10:53:47 GMT
Let's just bask in Ally looking like some kind of total badass like an 80's action hero. Y'know, those guys who'd yank grenade pins out with their teeth even though those pins are actually really hard to pull out and you'd probably rip your teeth out trying to do that, but really that's just how badass they are. I do that sort of thing all the time.
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Post by Emily on Jun 14, 2012 18:42:12 GMT
with more axes.
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Post by Mr Picalini on Jun 14, 2012 19:18:41 GMT
Let's just bask in Ally looking like some kind of total badass like an 80's action hero. Y'know, those guys who'd yank grenade pins out with their teeth even though those pins are actually really hard to pull out and you'd probably rip your teeth out trying to do that, but really that's just how badass they are. I do that sort of thing all the time. What, rip out grenade pins with your teeth, or bask in your own glory?
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Post by Emily on Jul 11, 2012 22:17:46 GMT
04_10 i really really like how this turned out. I spent ages thinking, how can I show them looking down a hole, show the hole being dark and mysterious and have them all disappear down it all on one page without it being boring. This was the ultimate answer.
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Post by Emily on Jul 25, 2012 22:33:38 GMT
04_11 This is where I start taking my serious editing scissors to the order in which Stu wrote this. this interlude was written somewhere near the end, but it needs to be here so you guys aren't just like "who the hell is this idiot? or her? or that girl?" and things will make sense.
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Post by tangent on Jul 26, 2012 13:28:27 GMT
Heh. The editing process is sometimes more important than the actual writing. I know that I'm still stuck in my rewrite/edit process for one mostly-complete novel... ^^;;
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Post by Emily on Aug 9, 2012 16:23:08 GMT
get used to this guy, he is morally upright, noble and one of the rare OCs... he exists for a purpose but even stu acknowledges he is pretty irritating.
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Post by Emily on Aug 16, 2012 21:52:11 GMT
he's one of those people who goes "noooooooooo" and "whyyyyyyyyyyyyy"
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Post by X'o'Lore on Aug 17, 2012 16:20:06 GMT
I'm just assuming she had a distinct need to test out the stabbiness of her funky stabby spear. The results appear inconclusive. She should probably try another test on that noisy guy. Preferably before he draws the attention of more bystanders to interrupt the "scientific process".
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