Post by Ally on Sept 26, 2005 16:27:13 GMT
To Alice,
My name is Jonathan Foo, and I'm a 21-year-old from Malaysia. Just thought youd like to place a name and age to the person that just emailed you.
Right, now that I've gotten that out of the way, it's time to actually talk about what I emailed you about.
I just read your story, or at least a few chapters of it, at the site www.angelfire.com/falcon2/the_shadows/index.html. I'm intrigued, and I'd like to read more... but then again, I'm one of those crazy people that reads a lot, both in books and online.
First things first - I'd like to read more. It looks like it could become quite an interesting book / story to read, and I would enjoy learning more about these 'Shadows', as well as many others. And keep trying to get this published - there are a lot of hopefuls out there, you and I, and many others, who are trying to publish our own stories, our own books. Sadly, I haven't actually completed a single story - I merely have the ideas for a few.
Oh, also, I caught a spelling error in Chapter three, Kier. At least, I think it's an error. Correct me if I'm wrong -
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Keir and his uncle listed as she told them a slightly edited version of what had happened. She knew they wouldn't believe the boy had just appeared. She didn't believe it herself.
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Forgive me for making assumptions, or being wrong myself, but it strikes me that the word should be "listened". It's the only thing that has a close spelling to it, and also makes sense.
Another thing, about one of the things in the Prologue... one of your characters, Damien, I believe, swears by saying "Christ, you people are sick!" But, unless you did that on purpose, and he's from our world, he shouldn't even know about Christ, as I doubt the world where the Octans live have a Christ.
Still, I'm just a reader.
Hoping to hear from you, and to read more. May you gain success, and be well in all circumstances.
God bless.
With regards,
Jonathan M. Foo.
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Hi
I just finished reading the chapters you posted and I would like to read
the rest if its possible. Count this as a positive review.
Christopher Billiu
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hi i really liked your story, especially the dialogue and i would like to read more. i hope that my email will help to get this put in print.
from heather
There ya go! ^_^
My name is Jonathan Foo, and I'm a 21-year-old from Malaysia. Just thought youd like to place a name and age to the person that just emailed you.
Right, now that I've gotten that out of the way, it's time to actually talk about what I emailed you about.
I just read your story, or at least a few chapters of it, at the site www.angelfire.com/falcon2/the_shadows/index.html. I'm intrigued, and I'd like to read more... but then again, I'm one of those crazy people that reads a lot, both in books and online.
First things first - I'd like to read more. It looks like it could become quite an interesting book / story to read, and I would enjoy learning more about these 'Shadows', as well as many others. And keep trying to get this published - there are a lot of hopefuls out there, you and I, and many others, who are trying to publish our own stories, our own books. Sadly, I haven't actually completed a single story - I merely have the ideas for a few.
Oh, also, I caught a spelling error in Chapter three, Kier. At least, I think it's an error. Correct me if I'm wrong -
-----
Keir and his uncle listed as she told them a slightly edited version of what had happened. She knew they wouldn't believe the boy had just appeared. She didn't believe it herself.
-----
Forgive me for making assumptions, or being wrong myself, but it strikes me that the word should be "listened". It's the only thing that has a close spelling to it, and also makes sense.
Another thing, about one of the things in the Prologue... one of your characters, Damien, I believe, swears by saying "Christ, you people are sick!" But, unless you did that on purpose, and he's from our world, he shouldn't even know about Christ, as I doubt the world where the Octans live have a Christ.
Still, I'm just a reader.
Hoping to hear from you, and to read more. May you gain success, and be well in all circumstances.
God bless.
With regards,
Jonathan M. Foo.
* * *
Hi
I just finished reading the chapters you posted and I would like to read
the rest if its possible. Count this as a positive review.
Christopher Billiu
* * *
hi i really liked your story, especially the dialogue and i would like to read more. i hope that my email will help to get this put in print.
from heather
There ya go! ^_^